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Oh wow I had the hardest time changing this to PDF -__- Well anyways here is the new story I'm working on...tell me what you think.. I needs tweaks here and there but it's a good outline for now. It's basically an introduction to the story..so enjoy
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:iconaltairias:
He's such a gentleman~ I love the main girl too! She's tough but still has human faults.
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~kshelton2011 Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
He is but he still has no personality yet, I'm just going with the flow. :P And yeah she gets a lot tougher throughout the chapters. She hasn't trained with him yet >.> And yeah she has to be strong, plus she doesn't trust people at all. The girl that got killed was the only person she really trusted....shew now I wanna start typing again :P I'm starting to like this story.
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:iconaltairias:
GO KENDRA! USE TYPE! *it's super effective*


lol I'm liking it too just buff it up and get the charcaters down that's what every good story needs. Believable characters. : )
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~kshelton2011 Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
And I shall indeed O_O I won that battle.. :D

and yeah I went back through and changed a few things...it sounds a whole lot better now. And i'm still changing crap :P
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:iconaltairias:
Dude you typed that bitches ass into the grave! You won, hands down!
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~kshelton2011 Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Indeed XD! I sure did! :P
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:iconaltairias:
lol wait until you evolve then you can use PRINT!
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~kshelton2011 Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
LOL! XD! And I shall!
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*ArtisOneofThem Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, very awesome!!
Some bad grammar here and there, but like you said, it's an outline.

I like the swiftness of it all. But, a bit more descriptions here and there would be nice. Just to spice up the already fun flavor of the story.
Good work in throwing in her history, yet not drawling it out with boredom! I'm no good tossing in a person's history, so usually I go bits at a time over the whole story.

Can't wait to read more!
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~kshelton2011 Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh thank you! :D And yeah I was just trying to get an outline for the story, and my grammar sucks anyways :P But I shall try hard on this, because I thought it was a good idea.
Yeah I usually don't do a good job of putting the history of the characters out there either but, this one seemed to be easy because of the hardship she was going through.
I also have a hard time putting details in at certain areas, my teachers have always told me that. Ha But I think i've gotten better...slowly but surely (:

Thank you so much for your input! I thought people wouldn't like it as much as I did. :P So thankk you again (:
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